I Saved My Money to Bank
I saved my money in the Bank because bank is a good place to saved our money. Our money will be safety if we save in the Bank because the bank gives guarante to our money. The other advantages from saved money in the bank are very easy, fast, pleasant and safe. And then the bank gives as reward in case kupon.
Feedbacks:
- Organisation: Topic sentence and supporting sentences are good. It could be better if you put more explanation on why saving in bank is esay, fast, pleasant, and safe.
- Grammar : generally ok.
- kupon = coupon
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