Going On Vacation
Going on vacation at Taipa beach was boring. We started from campus at 10 A.M and arrived at 4 P.M. along the trip, the bus had not radio so we couldn’t enjoy the trip with music. ___ way to Taipa, the tire of the bus was broken. The driver took an hour to fix it. After the bus had been fixed, we continue the trip with the poor quality of street a long the journey. Finally, we arrived at Taipa beach at 4 P.M. unfortunately; the rain had just begun when we arrived at Taipa.
FEEDBACKS:
- Organisation: topic and supporting sentences are excellent.
- Grammar: use of past verbs is very good.
- Sentence 3: On the way to ... (the tire --> tyre), the tyre was flat (bocor)
- Sentence 5 : poor quality of street --> bad road
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